Comments on: The Four Year Hole — Beginning of Scene 2 http://gibby747.wordpress.com/2008/05/19/the-beginning-of-scene-2/ Because nobody can eat 50 eggs Wed, 07 Oct 2009 00:09:55 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: nate burger http://gibby747.wordpress.com/2008/05/19/the-beginning-of-scene-2/#comment-28 nate burger Mon, 19 May 2008 21:15:59 +0000 http://gibby747.wordpress.com/?p=10#comment-28 hey drew - just so you know. I have been reading each installment. I dig so far; reads more like a screenplay than a stageplay, kind of. but it's entertaining. quick comment - I think that kirsten's attitude toward colin at the beginning of this scene comes a little abruptly. she's only met him earlier that day and their relationship reads like it's weathered months of constant friction. just something to think about. keep it up, buddy. peace, nate hey drew -

just so you know. I have been reading each installment. I dig so far; reads more like a screenplay than a stageplay, kind of. but it’s entertaining. quick comment – I think that kirsten’s attitude toward colin at the beginning of this scene comes a little abruptly. she’s only met him earlier that day and their relationship reads like it’s weathered months of constant friction. just something to think about. keep it up, buddy.

peace,
nate

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